| 2018-10-18 15:31:16 |
How Traditions Start – part 2
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I’m not usually one for “educational” stories. They usually play out a bit slowly and predictably, but the sex in this one was so deftly written. Great job! Very hot! |
| 2019-01-03 18:06:51 |
It started at the beach
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Story lacks tension and detail. Too much of it was Tawny doing one thing “and then everybody else did it, too.” Needs more variety and a distinct personality in each of the characters. |
| 2019-01-21 22:15:14 |
Teasing Dad, again.
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Great story. Would love to hear more about your adventures with Daddy and others. Just change up the perspective so it’s not this constant back-and-forth. It would be better from a straight third-person point of view, instead of a split first-person POV. |
| 2019-01-24 07:14:54 |
PLAY THINGS_(1)
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Wow, this is pretty wicked! I hope there’s more coming. Who are you going to jump into next? Hopefully a reluctant daddy. |
| 2019-01-30 02:08:36 |
Sis Watches
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Pretty good, but just a tip, the word you want is labia. Labia are the two pussy lips. Labial is an adjective, as in labial lips (though that’s often redundant, anyway). Labium is the singular, as in I saw one of her labium peeking out. |