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Comments from BashfulScribe
| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2015-04-23 15:52:09 | How to Write a Terrible Sex Story | Anon1, you are very right. Because this is an essay, though, I wanted to format it like one. Each paragraph has its topic so I decided to keep the correct format for essays rather than for the site. Anon2, good eye, I fixed the typo. Though it should be 'paragraph after paragraph.' Don't worry, I am writing another story - this was just in the interim. 'I more want you to' is actually technically correct, but I rephrased it just in case. And hey, as long as I made you think, that's all that matters. My goal wasn't to be correct, that's up to opinion. But when a piece is as strongly opinionated as this one, it generates discussion, like yours, which is what I wanted. Cheers, all. |
| 2015-05-20 06:13:50 | How to Write a Terrible Sex Story | Yup. It's a living. I'd rather be an egocentric douche than wrong anyway. I'd like to hope a lot of my points in this essay are correct as it pertains to XNXX. Pretty much all writers, myself included, have a LOT to learn when it comes to making a good sex story. I only touched on areas I believe I could - no point in me advising on writing tropes I lack, because I wouldn't be able to justify it. As well, besides referencing my own story to prove a point of using certain tropes correctly, is it really egotistical to point out the flaws in most writing? I'm not delusional - my story sucks in a lot of ways. As soon as an artist claims their work is amazing or they're a genius (Kanye comes to mind) it's totally fine. But if one person criticizes another's art, they're an 'egocentric douche.' I'm not really egocentric - I think quite lowly of myself in real life. My praise for my story I spout is mostly parroting what others have said. I am, however, critical and very unkind. |
| 2015-05-22 00:08:28 | Let's Talk | I suppose you have a point... It was more along the lines of 'the important opinion regarding to these stories is you all' and I figured people read my updates so they can get updated on my story. Didn't mean to come across as full of myself, sorry about that. |
| 2015-07-27 22:07:39 | Bloodsport Fairytale | Saw your comment on my essay. Feel free to email me for further remarks. You have the makings of a story, but there's nothing really grabbing me. Your exposition is blatantly obvious, even in Courtney's quips, and takes me out of the story. You barely focus on the protagonist at all before jumping to something else, which just leaves me wanting to know about what you've already established, i.e. him. Cut out the 'I'm on the run' comment, it's much better without you explaining every detail. The 'in case you couldn't tell' etc. acknowledgement of the reader is distracting, and makes me wonder who I, the reader, am to the protagonist in a way you don't acknowledge. Keep building the relationship between the two. What happens outside the sheets makes what happens between them more interesting. You were good at building atmosphere but kind of stopped when they opened their mouths. Keep writing. It's good of you to get stuff out there. <3 |
| 2015-08-22 18:26:44 | In the family (part 3) | Your writing technique is very good. I hope you continue to use it well. Your story itself appears a little... 'Safe.' It's doesn't seem too different from the average sex story. I'd love to be able to point to something in your story that makes it different from other stories on this site. I hope that comes true in the future, because I'd love to see your technique married to a good, unique story. |