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Comments from Danejarous
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| 2011-06-24 12:43:43 | (directed at my own comment) Damn; I meant to type that they won't be there much longer. Dumb mistake. |
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| 2011-06-25 11:10:06 | Delirium | Great story. I could leave just that, but where is the fun in that. This is a very well written story with an original storyline. The length of the story is one of the only small drawbacks that could have been remedied with separate installments. The fact that I read the whole story at once shows that it is interesting. I am usually not one to complain about sex scenes (I think that story should beat out sex), but these ones were a bit under developed. The characters were easy enough to understand and they each had distinguished personalities. Finally, I would have liked to have learned more about the history of Becca and Gracey's race, species, ancestors, etc. All-in-all, it was a fantastic story and shoot me a couple more messages when you come out with something new. |
| 2011-06-25 21:28:56 | (To anonymous poster below this comment) Wow; I try please every type of reader but my god. I thought that I was a little bit to detailed in my writing, but what you ask of me is to create an entire universe. Your points are valid, but a little bit of positive would have made me feel like I didn't just get shot in the face. As for the quoting part... I have heard this before and I am just going to tell you to notice that the story is being told (therefore it is sometime in the future; quotes would only occur in a real time story). Also, I would love to include actual quotes, I truly would, but it is ridiculously time-consuming to do so. I may be lazy or selfish, but I think you are asking too much. And finally, thank you for being the first person to ever say that I didn't build a realistic plot. Finally, I appreciate the amount of time you put into writing your feedback. Due to this comment, I feel compelled to dig deeper. Also, I would like to read a story that you found perfe |
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| 2011-06-26 15:02:11 | My birthday surprise_(0) | Decent story; definitely better than the very poor rating it has. The first couple sentences actually made me crack up a bit. It is a bit odd for someone to look at a room full of their family and wish to lose their virginity? I just thought that it was somewhat comical. Write a few more stories to get your footing, and you will be a great writer. Positive vote, because everyone starts somehow. |
| 2011-06-26 18:30:09 | Just woke up and looked at the clock and realized that I should start part 3 if I want to get it done by tomorrow morning. Part 3 is going to be considerably longer because I have a lot of ideas before I head to part 4. I should have posted some time tomorrow (hopefully) because I am having someone proof read; I miss way too much when I proofread my own writing. |