| 2016-01-01 02:54:39 |
A Satyr’s Revenge
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please write a sequel to this!! |
| 2016-01-01 06:46:12 |
The Dragon's Treasure, Part I
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please write another chapter!! |
| 2017-10-15 10:21:19 |
IT watches Always_(0)
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well first off you say he is filthy rich then say he was lived at an orphanage and yet give no explanation as to how he became wealthy? also I doubt you proof read any of that nor bothered to see if it needed any editing. It was also rushed and lacking certain elements to make it a decent story. try rewriting it and taking your time. if this is your first story then its understandable. if it isn't you need to go read other stories and draw from them a better understanding of how a tale should be told. hopefully you do better next time. |
| 2017-10-21 06:24:25 |
The Wolf Inside
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needs some editing, with grammar and such but mostly you need to separate the paragraphs using double spaces. I might read this after you have fixed it. best of luck. |